The story began
when we agreed to
visit a friend's house on Talango (Island <- optional). On Sunday
morning at exactly 05:30 our friends had gathered at
my house to ride their bicycles
to go to Talango, where my
friends lived. The journey was fun because it was the first time we traveled by riding a bicycle.
The beauty of the
scenery and the cool morning air was refreshing as
we passed up the
trip in Kalianget Harbor. Kalianget port is a means of crossing that
connects the island
Talango - Sapeken - Kangean
On arrival at
Kalianget Harbor, we rested, then walked around the harbor area, whilst (It's really up to you whether if you want to use 'whilst' or 'while') enjoying the
beautiful blue sea
and ships and wind gusts that made our hearts peaceful and cool. Once was enough,
then we boarded the ship to arrive on the island. Gusts of
wind blowing breeze
and sunny weather made our trip meaningful. And once again, we were presented by the stunning beauty of nature that God has
created. About 10
minutes later, we finally arrived on the island.
We rushed home, leaving our friends.
At my friend's house, we went inside and then were
presented with a variety of food and drinks. Formed friendships led to a
feeling of happiness that arose due to the atmosphere of the meeting. It was so
much fun. when we conversed between one another until we didn't know that it
was 12 o'clock midday.
Finally, we decided to return home. We also said goodbye to our friends and family to get back to my friend's
house, respectively. Although we felt extremely exhausted, we were still
excited. It was fun and exciting to get together with friends.
suddenly on the way home, me and my friends agreed to visit the little market
at the western end of Talango. The island was lush and green. There were
lots of trees that grew on both sides of the road. Once we were satisfied, we
finally went back home. Personally, I thought this trip was fun because it was
an adventure in the wild.
I'm sorry that I almost completely altered the 3rd and 4th paragraph. I hope it's ok.
arise - arose <- past tense
while - whilst
Whilst is a more 'dramatic' form of while. Whilst is an older form of while, but they basically have the same meaning.
Previously I had all the mistakes marked but when I copied it, the marks were gone so plz bear with me.
Maaf aku hampir mengubah total paragraf 3 sama 4, semoga gpp.
Past tense banyak memakai was / were